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"The resemblance was breathtaking. Disorienting. Rahim Khan's Polaroid hadn't done justice to it. The boy ahd his father's round moon face, his pointy stub of a chin, his twisted seashell ears, and the same slight frame."
I believe that my paper was written well overall. The grade I received was a 77/100. My thesis is arguable and my first topic sentence was clear, although, my other two did not reflect the theme of my paper. I'm also missing a couple concluding sentences. My quotes/explanations were the strongest elements on this essay. If I could write this essay over again I would include better supporting details and also use better topic sentences that correlate with my thesis statement.
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